Adelaide University Bachelor graduate with a passion for reading, English and a care for her students

Vicky does well to analyse her own work, listen to and apply feedback, and apply suggestions in her own work. Even over the course of a couple weeks and two sessions, she has really come a long way with her essay - well done!
A key thing to work on could be proofreading her own work by reading it aloud to herself (a whole paragraph at a time) - this can help with figuring out where to put commas for a pause, and to figure out if the text flows well and makes sense. You've already improved a lot in terms of flow Vicky, keep it up! :)